November 9, 2010

midnite sun





...
if the serenity of forever

could cradle his black heart


inhale


exhale


an onyx diamond in time


no matter the distance


he loudly shined

insanely near or intimately far


i know that he


if he was the bright white buttonin the center of darkened silk

orif he was the steam of shooting stars


failing to fall down


could not possibly bemore gorgeous


than in those treasured momentsi knew


i love


i still see...{'MoonandSun' pix by Jen_Beans}
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16 comments:

  1. Brian MillerNovember 9, 2010 at 5:21 PM

    wow. and you carry him with you...always. nice one shot!

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  2. Adam Common, PoetNovember 9, 2010 at 5:32 PM

    Lovely!

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  3. moondustwriterNovember 9, 2010 at 8:48 PM

    I love the whole circle
    you start with an intriguing picture and you pull the reader into the button hole of illusion and out again

    So glad to have you at One Shot - Please feel welcome anytime to share your work

    Moon smiles

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  4. hedgewitchNovember 9, 2010 at 10:16 PM

    Nice breaks and progressions, abrupt contrasts, strong images, soft words...beautiful work. Greatly enjoyed it.

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  5. AnonymousNovember 9, 2010 at 10:33 PM

    A piece of the universe turned inside out and outside in with love.

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  6. Steve IsaakNovember 10, 2010 at 4:32 AM

    Spare language/imagery, masterful line breaks, etc. Excellent work.

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  7. BubbaNovember 10, 2010 at 11:26 AM

    Nice One Shot, Lili!

    (I dig your color-scheme!)

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  8. ClaudiaNovember 10, 2010 at 12:01 PM

    the steam of shooting stars...beautiful poem with a silent ending like the last drops of water falling softly - nice one shot - great to meet you

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  9. Desert RoseNovember 10, 2010 at 1:51 PM

    lili..dear lili..you just knocked me out with this one..! wow..totally mind blowing..!your words are intense,passionate and drip in love..:)
    stunning one shot..;)

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  10. AnonymousNovember 10, 2010 at 5:15 PM

    lovely.

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  11. June_ButterflyNovember 10, 2010 at 7:03 PM

    Gorgeously passionate yet so gentle.I can almost know,love and see with you!

    Love the look of your blog,too.One of my fav colors.Brings more passion to your words.

    Great one shot.Sure glad I found you!

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  12. FireblossomNovember 10, 2010 at 9:36 PM

    I, too, like the line breaks and the whole mood of your poem! And the accompanying picture is spectacular.

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  13. Shashidhar SharmaNovember 11, 2010 at 5:03 AM

    Dear Lili
    Its perfect.. the imagery, the thoughts behind it all.
    "insanely near or intimately far"
    Beautiful.

    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya
    Twitter: @VerseEveryDay
    Blog: http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com

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  14. MarshyNovember 11, 2010 at 7:55 AM

    a beautifully worded piece...thanks for sharing pete

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  15. wanderer and vagabondNovember 12, 2010 at 1:05 AM

    I bow to your great words and I bow to the header image too...masterpieces indeed.


    Come along and join the challenge to think beyond...visit the link

    http://wizardmeetsvagabond.blogspot.com/2010/06/recall_11.html

    and share your own imagination triggered by the image...the comment section is waiting for you....



    "Helping readers to think and increase their imagination power so that they can express their thoughts better"

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  16. XXXDecember 6, 2010 at 11:11 PM

    Hi Lili - stunning unfolding of images here; r when The 'he' as a white button loombing out is very powerful x

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